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The Spider's Web (HM)

They met upon the internet,
he was gentle and oh so kind.
Falling into this spider's web,
in silky words she was entwined.

Inside she felt safe and secure,
it was time to let her guard down.
With the false hopes she was given,
that's when he really went to town.

She's left feeling so embarrassed;
overwhelmed, she's lost and confused.
She can't believe what he has done,
nor did she ask to be abused.

Never noticing at the time,
maybe she didn't want to see.
He'd become a cyber bully
and now she sits writing this plea.

Beware of cyber predators,
they'll tell you all you want to hear.
Preying on those who are lonely,
for on the net they have no fear.

They'll never feel any remorse,
tossing your heart out like its trash.
As you sit shattered to pieces,
a broken mirror's shards of glass.

So please beware of who you meet,
make sure you see them face to face.
And be sure that your first meeting,
is in a very public place.

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  • zorman32
    December 19, 2008
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    Gold

    This contest cannot be judged because there are too few entrants, points will be donated to the account owners instead. Please message me if they don't show up, I will try to bookmark the poems as they are removed from the contest and the contest is closed. Thank you for your entry.

  • zorman32
    December 19, 2008
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    Good advice, Excellent write!

    Thanks for your entry, in addition to the other entrant, this one shows a side of predatory behavior that most don't think about. How people can do to others what they would never get away with in public and still think it's okay is beyond me. Excellent write, and excellent advice, thanks again for your entry.


  • Inside and out
    December 18, 2008
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    This is such a powerful piece. Well thought out and great execution. Good luck in the contest.


  • WordsDoMatter
    December 16, 2008

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    super

    a great message of warning you gave here... I on the other hand, met my beautiful bride online. - Kevin


  • DesolatELifE
    December 16, 2008

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    This is a good expression of such a common situtation. Well written, great message. It's nice, too, that, in the last stanza, it offers some advice!


  • Tawni Risley silver member
    December 16, 2008

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    intense

    I had an internet for a long time an our meeting was private. I will admit that it was one of the most scariest things I ever did. T his is very smart and gorgeously written.

  • zorman32
    December 16, 2008
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    Excellent!

    Clear depictions, clear instructions, nice rhyme scheme, it's a great job! I sort of stumbled in reading on the line "on their PC they have no fear" might read better with the word computer instead of pc or "on the net..." I dunno, maybe it's fine the way it is, and I got caught up in reading too quickly. Very good job indeed, good luck!

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