You're the best contortionist I've ever met
Forming innocent me into a knowing waste
Showing me a world once full of love and purity
Only to have lies and drugs in its place
You've tried to seduce me once more in your web
Trapped with sticky coos of guilt and pain
I guess you thought me a naive young being
And all I want is for you to feel the same
The same way that I did, alone, unwanted
Uselessly attempting to fix every concern
My biggest wish, and biggest problem
Is trying to cool the heat of your burn
It's carved into my core and will not leave
You fake religious prick, I yearn to watch you hurt again
Do not expect me to be there waiting to help
It's done, it's over, be miserable-
Oh, and for your sake, Amen.
Author notes
By: Sarah
(Pensively Ignorant)
Lesson learned. Don't date people that don't have their own shit together.
A contest entry
- What Would You Say To Your Ex? by Priya1989.
600 points, ended January 23, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think?
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DUDE, SARAH!!!
I totally have not even been on here in fricken forever, but I was procrastinating and on a whim wanted to see what crap I had posted on here from years gone by (oh, middle school, such wonderful days XD). Well anyway, I saw you here and your awesome picture and new name and was like "OH SNAP!" and decided to check it out. Guess what, you had been online just a few days ago! So I did an "oh snap" again and decided to comment here and tell you.
And oh. Bytheway. I fricken love this poem.
You are so awesome.
But this site makes me miss writing poetry. I have been writing a little bit since being on here, but it's just not the same! I'm wondering if I should start on here again. I wonder if I would even have TIME to start on here again. Haha
But anyway, that was my little ramble. Love you.
<33 Carrie
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Hehe, thanks Carrie!
Yes time has definitely prevented me from writing more often, but as long as you continue whether it be on here or just in a journal, make sure to! Thank you for the comment on this by the way.
You should definitely write on here. Ahh the memories of middle school!!!
Anyway, thank you again. I love your "Oh Snaps" because I "Oh Snap" too.
Love you too dear!!!
~Sarah
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Well written and I guess a lot of people have to get their acts together, but one must not allow themselves to become too judgemental. I thought your poem was a great write seeking settlement away from someone whos only chore seem to be to tear you down with them. That is the type you do not need to be around while you are in the throes of learning. Go girl!
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Yes, this ex definitely tore some people down: me, his mom, sister, but most of all, himself. He ODed so yeah, I should never have given him a chance afterwards, but I did and got hurt just as bad as before. You live and learn though I suppose right?
Thanks for the comment and support. By the by, love the cow icon.
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Hi there
Thank you for entering my contest with this excellent piece
I loved the words you used here and there, they evoked wonderful imagery and onomatopoeia, I think. I liked the mixed bag of emotions you have depicted, the hurt yet the detached analysis you can provide and how you wish your ex felt what you did. I know totally what you mean there.
In line 7, the spelling is 'naive'
These are the parts I liked specifically about your poem:
Line 1 & 2. Yes I liked the contortionist word. That's such a wonderful and fitting way to describe an ex that tries to change you isn't it. Or changes themselves... I love how you change from innocent to 'knowing waste'.
Line 5 & 6: Again, excellent imagery here.
Line 12: Interesting.
Line 17: Brilliant end.
Thanks for entering and best of luck
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Thank you!
Opps, I will change naive sorry! I hope that didn't completely throw away my chances with this contest! :/
Thank you for reading, and it was a great contest idea. Good luck deciding on everything!
~Sarah
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"You're the best contortionist I've ever met
Forming innocent me into a knowing waste"
great line.. really pulls you into the poem..
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Hehe I had to look up how to spell contortionist because I suck at spelling. Thanks for reading!
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