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The Day You Went Away

 

 

You gently took my hands

and placed them into yours.

 

Words resembling an austere zephyr,

echoed in grey skies,

blowing me away into a vast oblivion.

 

[You had to go...]

Author notes

Prompt: Harsh Winds
30 words

Picture Credit: http://ciuva.deviantart.com/art/In-the-centre-of-the-storm-52901036

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  • Meroza
    December 31, 2008

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    Brilliant! Such a none-sad yet sad goodbye, written like a true poet! Love it

    Congrats!


  • xDemonicxAngelx
    December 22, 2008

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    This was gorgeous, I loved every single bit of it. The start and the end were my favourite parts. So beautiful, you did a great job with the prompt! Congrats on the bronze!

    Take care


  • etoile
    December 17, 2008

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    in the first stanza you said 'hand' then you said 'them' so you should either change it to hands or change them to something singular, maybe even 'it'?

    otherwise i loved this. the imagery is beautiful, amazing take on the prompt. i like the middle section.

    thanks for entering and goodluck


  • Alyzeh
    December 17, 2008

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    Awww..this was sad. But beautifully said. I liked how you summed the story in just a few words! Lovely take on the prompt. All the best always.

    Muah


  • Joseph Hollis
    December 17, 2008

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    Those harsh winds do tend to carry people away. Wonderful take on the prompt and a perfect picture to compliment your words. Good luck!

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