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Guns, Lace and Cigarettes (prose)

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She sat crossed legged on a high stool, resting her arms on the bar and sipping a dry martini.
A rock band echoed in the background, but it wasn’t live, she’d have been blowing smoky kisses through the fog of blondes if it had been.
It played on a mono-chrome jukebox; the song was selected by a newcomer who’d bought the martini she sipped.
Her blood red lips were pouting at a cigarette when he complimented her lace lined cocktail dress. What he didn’t see was the gun in her garter and the ring beneath her glove. But he didn’t need to know.
She sipped her drink slowly, listening to light behind his silhouette, tasting his presence with her need for solitude, and though she found his conversation irrelevant she watched his mouth pronounce L’s and Q’s as if the next sound would be an invention.

The room began to reverberate with a new-fangled tune, one contrary to the previous and one that reminded her of her yen of isolation. So, as the last of her martini splashed her throat, the door swung behind her...
Her skin felt the night’s breath and she pondered his face, when she’d slammed her money in the jukebox, as he poured her drink, and as he spent the night chatting to the women beside her.
Her heels clicked on the pavement and her fingers tickled the metal against her leg.


This wasn’t going to be her last night after all.  

 

 

 

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I took any style welcome in the contest to mean prose too...hope it's ok.

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  • Ditt0
    January 4

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    This is a beautiful write Silver... I really digged the imagery and I found this piece refreshing... However, I found the title somewhat lacking and the ending somewhat, um, unrefined. But it is still great work and I still love it...

    Well Done


  • redhanded
    December 17, 2008

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    I really like this piece and I am in love that picture
    keep it flowing
    best of luck to u
    andi
    (redhanded)


  • badnovocaine
    December 16, 2008

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    I think you just made me the happiest girl alive
    Yea, prose is totally OK, in fact I welcome it. And I loved this picture also, I was secretly hoping someone would do this one.
    This write kind reminded me of watching an old black and white movie, classic, in a good way. It had an old fashioned sense to it, like the 50s era, anyways I loved it. I could imagine watching a scene in a movie as I read this, also kind of reminded me of SIn City, in a weird but good sense.

    The room began to reverberate with a new-fangled tune, one contrary to the previous and one that reminded her of her yen of isolation.
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    Such words, such talent
    thank you for entering.


  • raw love
    December 16, 2008
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    you have a way with words.
    clever creation.