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Mine

This land is mine, each wall and window
light and shadow, color and shade
And any human animal who enters
becomes mine by existing in this space.
(That broken lamp, however,
has nothing to do with me).

 

Anything that catches my interest is made mine,
quickly conquered and dragged into my land;
The countless forks and spoons didn't put up much of a struggle,
though the cat was quite a challenge to claim,
but that just made it a grander feat
when he was finally captured and brought before my throne.
(even if he ran away again the instant I let him go
complaining to mom, and making a scolding mine too).

That carefully folded laundry: mine,

but I don't want that flock of birds out on the street

except to make them pay for their nerve:

flying about outside my window

blaring their annoying songs into my air.

this old dog just may learn some new tricks;

I'll fly just to get them, if that's what it takes.

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Prompt 2: Word Bank.
Words used: wall, light, animal, broken, drag, fork, struggle, feat, fold, blare, old.

I don't know how good this is, I was trying to make it from the POV of one of those yappy little dogs that seems to think it owns the universe.

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  • moaner
    May 14

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    hahaha too true, sounds like a spaniel if you ask me, mad and dominant in a funny way hehe well done, and good luck in my contest x


  • Maldronah
    December 26, 2008
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    Nicely done, perceptive and humorous.
    Dogs and humans?
    Not so different.


  • Twelve-and-Charlie
    December 16, 2008

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    Ah, that's awesome! Hilarious.

    I love that the broken lamp has nothing to do with you (laughed, so hard) --talk about character in writing.


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    December 16, 2008

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    Nice job. I have seen the little foo-foo dogs with this attitude. Some times I want to to punt them. You have conveyed the attitude well in your poem.

    Mike


  • Deceits Tears silver member
    December 16, 2008

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    GREAT
    I have a big ole beast of a dog and he so thinks just like that I'm sure
    Well done and good luck in the contest

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