Across silent moors shadows creep
As night casts darkness there's no sleep
For thoughts rain rampant through my mind
Ferocious recall all but blinds
And memories are left to weep.
As wind whips round minds storage seeps
And death around the mountains sweep
In bygone days I feel confined
And shadows creep...
Lightning times that stab and leap
As I remember feeling cheap
Into the ground I let you grind
In shameful thoughts that love I'd find
Stormy weather was all I'd reap
And shadows creep...
Author notes
Image 5 - storm by *Toadsmoothy2
http://toadsmoothy2.deviantart.com/art/storm-106104449
Rondeau
A Rondeau is a French form, 15 lines long, consisting of three stanzas: a quintet, a quatrain, and a
sestet with a rhyme scheme as follows: aabba aabR aabbaR. Lines 9 and 15 are short - a
refrain (R) consisting of a phrase taken from line one. The other lines are longer (but all of the
same metrical length).
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Comments
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Loving the rhyme. This was well done. Such a natural flow. Perfect word choice. I love the final stanza!
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Wonderful
Very creative and so well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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This poem, well written with great fluency, but it is very abrasive in a way that isn't common for you. It seems you were in a dark state of mind when you wrote it. Excellent all the same.
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You can't go wrong with storm imagery! And you have used it so deftly here. I love the mood you have created... it is so heavy and brooding...Excellent word choice and flow of grievances here. Wonderfully done.
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Now this ones an interesting form to learn,
This is a very dark write Gaylene, probably one of the darkest i've read from you.
Brilliant as always
All the best to you in the contest
Ken
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