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Grey eyes holding me still



Your grey eyes glow
Under the moonlight

It stops my world from crashing
It ties up the lose ends
And glues together the broken pieces

It makes me float on still air
And swim in drops of sunshine

~

In your grey eyes
I see a smile in every raindrop
I see stars that shine for us
I see angels dancing on clouds
I see cupid with his bow and arrow

~

Maybe this feeling I get
Every time I see your eyes
Hear your whispers of love
Smell your sweet scent
Is love

Or maybe it’s not
I just can’t tell yet

But boy, you make me go crazy

Author notes

'wubbie get down you fatty'

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  • Decorus Somnium
    January 10

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    Ohh love is such a great feeling ha? It really makes everyone go crazy. This is sweet, simple and awesome!


  • Sunkissed xo
    January 3

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    Ooo la la! This is beautiful! Once again, another poetic masterpiece. So sweet and tender, definitely blossoming love! My favourite line would have to be: "And swim in drops of sunshine". So cute and happy, reminds me of you! Ahh I could go on all day when talking about this poem, but I'll have to be content with one final WELL DONE ON ANOTHER FANTASTIC WRITE


  • Lexie
    December 22, 2008

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    awwww
    how adorable
    love
    sometimes we are just not sure if we are in love with someone or if we just have a crush. there is them times though when you know you are head over heals in love.

    Maybe this feeling I get
    Every time I see your eyes
    Hear your whispers of love
    Smell your sweet scent
    Is love


    i loved that stanza. great job. left me speachless. i give you 3 applauds for that poem.


  • ResplendentCloud
    December 19, 2008

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    I absolutly adore this piece, it perfectly corresponds with the title prompt

    good job and goodluck
    -Emm


  • Mr.
    December 16, 2008

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    Haha, loved it, and that last line was the best. Really beautiful.And I cracked up when I read 'wubbie get down you fatty'


  • LoveLikePoetry
    December 16, 2008

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    This is so nice
    Beautifully written, and I love the last line.
    Good luck in the contest, I think you'll do great <3


  • LoveDeprived
    December 16, 2008

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    i like how simple this is yet, how you just expand the wonderfulness of grey eyes, and i especially like the title sounds like a song's title.

    "i see a smile in every raindrop"

    lovely! just, just lovely!, im steal that line ..



  • hyper thing
    December 16, 2008

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    I love the emotion that you put in here and the words and everything

    CRAYONS

    MAWAK

    keep on writing

    cheers,
    dan


  • Truthful Sinner
    December 16, 2008

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    I love the emotion u put into this, the words are great to,

    my favorite line is:

    And swim in drops of sunshine

    Fantastic, keep up the good work.

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