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Parachute of Life

Falling through night sky
Tumbling in dark spaces left by summer stars
Lost in words that slice the soul like razor ice
Formed by winter’s frosty breath

Caught by the parachute of life’s beauty
A graceful swerve of cloud
In the clear winter’s night

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  • hawkeslake gold member
    February 21

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    Lovely lyrical lines, full of imagery that pulls us in. This is very well-done, and in my mind, deserved a trophy!


  • etoile
    January 8

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    good take on the prompt. the imagery is beautiful and this is very well written. i like it.

    thanks for entering and goodluck