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Illusion

I've seen your face in both mirrors and smoke,
and though it may have been a deception
it was intriguing, nonetheless:
that devious smile, so matching your laughter,
ringing about the corners of my mind,
though I've never quite met with your eyes;
you always manage to glance away,
as if the impossible wasn't mystery enough.
you whisper you're not ready yet,
that your eyes don't yet befit your splendor;
that you're building yourself from the smile up,
making sure every feature will taunt me.

 

 

 

 

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  • iamthebeatles
    January 30

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    This piece is an illusion in itself. Breathtaking really. Love this line;

    "as if the impossible wasn't mystery enough."

    Its absolutely true in an exotic way. great write. Love this piece.

    cassie


  • deadelegantfree
    January 10

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    A lovely piece! You worked everything together so well, you leave me sort of jealous! Nicely done! Breathless and captivating.


  • amaranthine lover gold member
    January 3

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    suggestion:

    - Please put your user name and mine Amaranthine Lover in the author's notes so that I know who you are and that you read my rules.


  • insideinsanity
    January 1

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    'though I've never quite met with your eyes;
    you always manage to glance away,
    as if the impossible wasn't mystery enough.'

    I think that's my favourite section. But the whole piece is a good little mystery piece. Very nice.


  • The Fun House silver member
    December 25, 2008

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    A very strong piece, yet written with such beautiful, subtle lines. I could not help but to be captivated by this piece. Seems the chase is one and flowing towards nirvana. Totally an awesome poem!

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