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a dancer in the wind




she stretched to whisper

'take off your shoes'

and I saw her face
between toes.

I now live


without envy.

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  • ea silver member
    December 18, 2008
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    haha, that's funny.

  • Papagallo
    December 16, 2008

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    Hmmm

    It took me a few reads before I discovered what was going on in these lies. I get a connection between lovers here.


  • ten thousand cicadas gold member
    December 16, 2008

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    lovely, and can be read a couple of ways. I always like it when you can take away multiple impressions/meanings from a poem. really nicely done