Mindful-
I listened to voices
through
the hollowed
wall
after all
was said and done
my heads’
…a steam kettle
A contest entry
- 20 words by Melissa Gayle.
500 points, ended December 19, 2008, 25 entries
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kewl haiku vibe.
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stunning
brilliance
beneath
your
titlea pleasure
to
read
God bless you my friend...
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woah, hold on... did you just change this?
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yep lol
it's called edit greeeeerrr
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Many times over I'd agree with you,me too. A reader can just envision the author of this outstanding piece attempting to sleep but disturbed by something unavoidably overheard.
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hi susie
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your writes never seem to disappoint me
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you're too cute...im glad they don't
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thanks? lol.... no you have this thing going with your words...
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striking ending...
damn good poem, too.
Mally, in twenty words
you conveyed a very
real feeling of pain.
you know i wish you
well in the contest.
love, lane
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