Corner of the alley,
next to garbage can,
under blankets,
shriveled old man.
Myriad of people
flow by on the street
he watches,
but to them,
remains unseen.
Author notes
Hey, at least I'm having fun!
Great contests!
A contest entry
- Pick a word - Write a poem in 10 LINES or Less (I) by The Fun House.
1050 points, ended January 3, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I think this is a well done piece. Not over wordy and yet it gets the imagery and point across beautifully. I think there have been times in life I've felt about the same way. Excellent
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Nice poem. I rather like the less is more, when it contains enough imagry to make you think or look around.
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Oh wow, this is so effective. It sent a jolt through my heart. This is a really great poem - bravo!
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So true...
...and so sad. Superb write.
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I like this. It's so true and so sad.
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For so few words, this has a lot of depth and great images!
Well done!
best wishes in your contest
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Oh My Word~
Having FUN is what it is all about
Love this and the flow of the line- I had to giggle for I felt this surge of laughter as if~
whimsical of sorts while writing
but even though he remained unseen-
for some reason- I am getting that troll type of image- there and then gone~
Mystical presence
Heck did my comment even make sense
me tonight~
No Mind me- I had a cup of Joe
-runs around and bumps into wall-
passes out....
Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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