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Innings

life's innings on earth
started with my first sigh
I do not know how to bat,
before learning to walk.
a game of unpredictability's
I am bowled at by others
I bat in crease of life
until my wicket fell,
then I have no choice,
but return to pavilion.

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Pick a word - Write a poem in 10 LINES or Less (I)

life is analogous to cricket game

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  • The Fun House silver member
    January 3

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    I like how you've used the metaphor here and your prompt. It says alot in few lines and I really enjoyed reading this. Great job.


  • Desire gold member
    December 15, 2008

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    Wow~

    This is quite a contest and Love how You took this prompt~
    and the analogy re: Life
    Very Creative also the line:
    bat in crease of life~

    Here we use baseball and You used cricket-
    Bravo on message!!
    Wonderful Voice You have shared
    Thank You for sharing Your Talent also Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    Best wishes too
    with much love & light~ Desire~*~


    • Venugopal gold member
      December 16, 2008
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      base ball and cricket are similar

      you are very cute in finding essence of the poem

      thanks a lot

      Venu