the warm bed i rest on,
your voice a smooth blanket
that eases me to sleep
Author notes
edited--20 words, including title
A contest entry
- 20 words by Melissa Gayle.
500 points, ended December 19, 2008, 25 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
critical comments welcomed
Comments
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I so admire your talent and your ability to write brilliance and beauty in so few lines....
I tend to be long winded lol
Another beautiful piece
Lynda
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enjoyed, saffrod, "JDG" have a good week ahead
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and this is how words create magic (:
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Very beautiful.
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thank you very much
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Officially my favorite three lines on Allpoetry.
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thank you
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Very nice.
I think I am beginning to like short poems again. It just seems like so much more can be said by saying less. -
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thank you, Scott
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Makes me pause and think about what calms me, in the winter, in loneliness, in wishing, these words are nicely crafted and stir warmth. Very pretty.
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beautiful and warm...cozy really...what nice thoughts.
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thank you very much
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this is lovely...feels as if one can wrap oneself in your words
~ Nicolette
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you might consider using your first line as your title...
and then starting with the second for the poem
this is lovely
m
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I edited it--thank you for the suggestion
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Oh . . . this just is so relaxing. It rests me and puts my dreams at ease.
Wonderful.
Garrison
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this is so calming & lovely
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