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In The Little Boat Of Tin

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She's never missed a single day
From the break of dawn till lunch time,
She circles the lake in the little boat of tin

No matter the weather; no cyclone could stop her

 

She peers intently into the depths
With a level of focus that can only be gained
When one is forced into unbearable grief,

The focus of someone with no other purpose 

 

The barramundi don't visit this lake anymore
And the trouts and salmon have not been seen since
No new trees or plants are growing on the marshy banks
And the old ones are withering a lot faster than normal

It would seem that all living things have that instinct to leave,
They seem to know when a place has brought nothing but death;
The death of a man, and the disruption of love's bond

And the untimely loss of an old woman's sanity

Perhaps even the water has started drying up now
And one day they'll find what she's been looking for each morning
But with each day she calls with a higher sense of desperation
And the chances are rising that they'll be finding her too

 

But maybe the river's rapids will take her away,

Carry her to the place where she can be reunited

With the man that she hasn't given up on all this time

And they can sail together again, in the little boat of tin

 

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Credit: http://krush.deviantart.com/art/Go-For-A-Catch-8205892

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  • Unsigned gold member
    January 8

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    This was a great story and one that enjoyed reading...

    Well done

    Good luck

    Simon


    • KyleBerg gold member
      January 8
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      Glad you enjoyed it
      Thanks for your comment, i appreciate it


  • LadyJane13
    December 28, 2008

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    Beautiful - I can relate to this(lol again too personal)
    Sadness is a silent killer and ever more so for the wanting which lingers like the white mist on the water full of illusive figures which we yearn to reach out to.Congrats on your win

    Jane


    • KyleBerg gold member
      December 28, 2008
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      So true, Jane.
      Thank you for the lovely comment, I'm glad you were touched by my poem.


  • Uniquely-Scarred
    December 17, 2008

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    i like the way you brought it back to the little boat at the end, i like the sadness in this and the longing good writing take care

    John


  • rinzurajan
    December 17, 2008

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    lovely imagery...and some wonderful portrayal of a woman's emotions...


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    December 16, 2008

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    Cleverly done....and I loved how you un-raveled the
    imagery for us to breathe in...and anguish her tender
    story and the connection of the lake dying adjoining
    their life forces together.

    wonderful!
    There truly is nothing sadder then witnessing a lake
    dying...wonderful poetic device to connect them so
    flawlessly together.
    BRAVO! BRAVO!
    ears/Seattle


    • KyleBerg gold member
      December 16, 2008
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      Thank you for the wonderful comment.
      I appreciate it a lot


  • Whispers of Hope
    December 16, 2008
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    wow this was touching! Intresting! different!

  • x0mystic
    December 16, 2008
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    This is amazing.
    Very touching.

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