sweet and tender with a scent that’s almost haunting.
-you can never forget it.
but you managed to shake yourself free
from my clutches of incense;
and you broke through my steel-ice-cold palms
that held your warm heart beside mine,
I tried to stay alive,
but without you and your warmth
it was impossible.
Author notes
prompt: vanilla ice
.. i know it's more of a pink color.. but it was a shade of red :S so hopefully it's alright.
picture: 'vanilla snow'
http://jay-cougar-prints.deviantart.com/art/Vanilla-Snow-70292197
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Hmm. Interesting. Very interesting.
I wasn't expecting that ending though. Sadly beautiful.
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As long as it was in the hues of red you are fine
I really like where the prompt took you. There is much emotion here and it’s refreshing to see the metaphors to boot. Great job.
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-you can never forget it.
but you managed to shake yourself free
from my clutches of incense;
oooh.
vanilla ice reminds me of the rapper lmao
vanilla snow sounds better -
I really like this piece. great metaphors and powerfully written
good luck
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nice sentiments here . . liked "with a scent that's almost haunting" and "you managed to shake yourself free from my clutches of incense" . . good luck in the contest !!
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I like.
As usual.
I don't think I can say anything more..
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very nice honey
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mann
i expected something
that had to do with oldschool rap
not something
amazing.
lol
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bahahahahahha
ahahaha
im so tired
and you just made me laugh my face off :S
even though it wasnt that funny lol
thanks for all the comments btw
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"-you can never forget it.
but you managed to shake yourself free
from my clutches of incense;"
Beautiful. You always have really interesting word that makes me stop and look twice. Loved it! Good luck in the contest you entered.
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I tried to stay alive,
but without you and your warmth
it was impossible.
i love that line...
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