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Captured

Captured
Stuck on the ledge
Screaming and tearing
Away at the rocks and dirt
Filth covering my dusty hands -
Goodbye

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  • Scyphon
    January 6

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    Very deep and rough as tho you dug your own grave
    dark and emotional fall, I really enjoyed this one


  • Draig aine gold member
    January 6
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    again so much with so little

    are not we all a bit stuck on a ledge?


  • storiesuntold gold member
    January 5
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    Great work here

    It has such feelings of nearing loss of life in this piece


  • thedevilsreject
    January 5
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    i like it

    its pretty gud


  • Let-Me-Go
    December 25, 2008
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    Deep!!!

    Thats kinda cool i really liked it alot!!! it was very deep!


  • Naznomarn
    December 15, 2008
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    Oooh very nice!

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