You stalk in dead of night,
mid my dreams that forbode.
You whisper in currents flight,
upon shoulders a heavy load.
There amid clouds dark gloom,
you waiver within the storm.
Sudden danger in unlit room,
upon window as shadows form.
Hair stand on end, sweat beads,
upon tongue, lay silent shrills.
Vivid imagination succeeds,
goosebumps caused by chills.
Felt as heart starts to beats fast,
quiver up and down my spine.
Tremble till the night has past,
who are you, this fear of mine?
Author notes
I chose title... Who Are You?
A contest entry
- Titles! by Walking Oxymoron.
700 points, ended December 28, 2008, 25 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Very scary. Glad I read this in the day. I need to sleep at night.
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Thank you for reading my poem it is most appreciated. Take care. Bless you. Sandy
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if you find out- let the rest of us know
I believe that critter has been around to a few of us with the willies in the night. Good job on this write lol, to think I had a corner on the boogie monster...mac
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Thank you for reading my poem it is most appreciated. Take care. Bless you. Sandy
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Great
This is wonderful
What a clever take on "Who Are You"
VERY ORIGINAL!
My fav stanza is the following...
"Hair stand on end, sweat beads,
upon tongue, lay silent shrills.
Vivid imagination succeeds,
goosebumps caused by chills."
I already had goosebumps by then
Wish you the best in the contest
Much love
David
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Good Morning Dave,Thank you for reading my poem it is most appreciated. Take care. Bless you. Sandy
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This is great, it works, most chilling, one can almost feel the emotions and see the goosebumps, I really loved this, blessing with love John
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Hello John, Thank you for reading my poem it is most appreciated. Take care. Bless you. Sandy
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hehe this is good, sends a chill down my spine xx
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Thank you for reading my poem it is most appreciated. Take care. Bless you. Sandy
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It works well, this write. I'm not used to reading poems set out quite like this, words like amid, and waver...
But yeah, the chill does happen, and I love the last line!
who are you, this fear of mine? -
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Thank you for reading my poem it is most appreciated. Take care. Bless you. Sandy
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Wow poet
Unlike you . But a dark write that speaks of hidden demons dwelling deep inside our troubled mind. Excellent work.
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Good Morning Bob, Thank you for reading my poem it is most appreciated. Take care. Bless you. Sandy
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This is a lovely work. To bring fear as a prompt as dreams taken from gloom and storm as fear in the room. Chills for the faint of heart, yet, it comes at a price to pay as the night passes. The rhyme is done nicely and meter well
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Hello Dan, Thank you for reading my poem it is most appreciated. Take care. Bless you. Sandy
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