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The Bridge (Mid 2008)

I stand here watching lovers pass
who fade into the mist,
young and old, hand in hand
that fortune chose to bless.

They never notice that I watch
with eyes that span the time
that seek some distant memory
which age does not define.

The haze obscures the distances
to where such thoughts may flee
and all the while, beneath the bridge
flows the river to the sea.

My eyes are gray of weariness
and yet the memory's there:
that once upon this very spot
love had not been fair.

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  • pixiestix gold member
    April 6
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    I read Beyond the Bridge first and think I see an connection. I think my comment still applies to that one though.

    It's difficult when we see others with something we want, especially when it comes to love. There's also all those preconceived notions of how it's "supposed" to be that come into play as well.

    "X" marks the spot in time and our hearts like a scar from a "love-ectomy" of sorts.

    Tones of melancholy and that sense of longing in the verses.

    Now I'll see if you respond to any of my comments on your poetry.


    • Yemassee gold member
      April 6
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      I didn't realize I has so many poems and stories about bridges. I need a better metaphor.

      I'm sure both bridges relate to the same topic. I was obsessed there for a while. I'm feeling far more sane these last couple or so months.

      I commented on the all.

      • pixiestix gold member
        April 6
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        You made a point to reply only because you wanted to prove me wrong


        • Yemassee gold member
          April 6

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          No, I read this comment last so that proves I didn't do it just to prove you wrong. I did it because you are a good friend and I'm an even better one.


          • pixiestix gold member
            April 6
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            Okay and I have a bridge in Brooklyn that's for sale

            Witty? Clever? Me? Why thank you.

            • Yemassee gold member
              April 6
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              trite? hackneyed joke? You? Why, you are welcome.


              • pixiestix gold member
                April 6

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                You're just jealous. That's okay. I'm used to that type of reaction from you.

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