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Irrevocably Replaced

The light fades from inside
His body cold
Lifeless next to me
Tears form only on the inside

I'll shed no tears for you
Only die on the inside
I killed the one I loved

All my past feelings gone

Happiness controls me

My want to smile

Such a grave mistake

Three words
You'd still be here
But that one action
Made you draw your last breath

One mistake, one thought
It poisoned me to oblivion

Shaking, I killed you

My one true desire

 

No regrets for this deed

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  • Lost Spirit
    December 15, 2008

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    wow thats ...really quite dark and haunting especially the part about lying next to him after the deed is done.