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They never saw it coming.

Today I lined up my yellow rubber ducks
and shot them one by one
cause innocence is overrated .

Author notes

this is what comes when your bored in french class really bad poems if this is even a poem

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  • Noir mariposa...x gold member
    March 9

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    Agreed.
    But why take it out on the poor duckies!!
    Sowwie, I has a thing for ducks and geese.

    That said, very striking write.
    Well done, I wish you luck

    Claire x


  • AbidoodleCullen
    January 25
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    Thanks for entering and good luck!
    <3 Abi


  • msclarinet23150
    December 24, 2008
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    lol

    baby i like this one


  • shadowofmyself5
    December 18, 2008

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    haha :] i like it
    it has a sarcastic tone.
    it seems that who ever would be doing this would have a sneer on their face.
    good job.


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    December 17, 2008

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    this was good
    i liked it. especially the ending
    it's like you had a vendetta out on the ducks or something


  • Wolf Mistress silver member
    December 15, 2008

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    Well...the first two lines made me smile REAL BIG...
    and I am really happy they were just your rubber ducks..


    Bored in class hey...
    XXJeannette


    • stargazer.
      December 15, 2008

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      Would never do this to real duckies
      baby ducks are cute

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