Some people dream and some people try
Those that succeed will fly high in the sky
Those that just imagine are different from those that do more
Of those who work at it… they will soar
Don’t give in just because it is distant thought
Try, try, and try, again until your mind is no longer blocked
Just enjoy the fact that your ideas may come to life
All because you put in hard work and strife
Let your ideas flow like water
The world for the better you may yet alter
Some people dream and some people try
Those that succeed will fly high in the sky…
Author notes
i thought of writeing this when i realized how our technology was advancing, and i realized how many people were coming up with such unique inventions
A contest entry
- Quote Contest! by vampedvixen.
400 points, ended January 14, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
what kind of thoughts does this poem bring up to the surface of your mind? anything at all? i dont care how stupid or random it is. feel free to comment
Comments
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Love this! Decided I was going to within two lines! Love it! It's very powerful, in a brilliantly good way. I adore the repetition of "some people dream and some people try/those that succeed will fly high in the sky." It's brilliant, and inspiring and just plain wonderful.
May I make some suggestions. On the assumption you said "yes"
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"Those that just imagine are different from those that do more
Of those who work at it… they will soar." The second line is a little short because you made the first so long. You could try "Those who work at it... it is them who will soar."
And I think "Try, try and try, again..." should be "try, try and try again..." I think there may be too many commas
This is a brilliant write, I adore it. Keep writing!
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i loved this poem !!!!!!!!!
beautiful and very hopeful
"Some people dream and some people try
Those that succeed will fly high in the sky
Those that just imagine are different from those that do more
Of those who work at it… they will soar"
well its ture !!!!!!!!!
this was worth reading... i loved the rhymes and the way you to this into words ...
i enjoyed reading !!!!!!!!
Good Write !
Shuberth
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