A distant past of quixotic roundelay call to me
Beckoning with their tunable ballad
Overting to me the past gone by
Quothing in rebus as they swelt my heart
Their vileness of wickedness wreathes one’s soul
Like a Sylph rides on a thought in attempts to pother my mind..
With their puissant depth of knowledge they foretell
Their pertness is dangerous and coy
Cutaneous eruption of these ancient beings
The perusal they speak with pithy
Their Nobleness overweens one’s eyes
Like the blind walking into a guiding light
Mislead by an angel who has fell
Wearing the cloak of promise to hide their deceit
Entrapping my soul in their naught
Musty mutters they speak until I am no more
Escape seems like it has preterlapsed my grasp
Silent screams I can only cry now
This forceful violation of chastity they have cursed me
There is no where to flee anymore
Lisa Lynn ‘08
Author notes
My Prompt, my muse on this particular poem was actually the contents of a very old dictionary I own- It has words and definitions from another era which I find highly intriguing. Once I lay my hand upon a page, feeling the parchment under my fingertips, it seems to take one into a euhporic type of mindset, like witnessing an ancient time.
I had came across the word 'Sylph', which is, an ancient spirit and the word 'Roundelay', which is, an ancient poem. This compelled me as I thought the two together would become something magical, complimenting one another. So I scribed my muse.
In a list
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I must admit that me and my horrible english had big trouble trying to even read this poem here and I put all my might in trying to understand it, but don't feel sad for that, its my fault for not studying the language good enough. Even tho I didn't understand all the details, I did understand enough to give you a rating.
And my confused score is 8/10
What I understood, I liked.
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I think it was a very bold move to choose the prompt you did.
I'm sure to someone who has a dictionary for a brain this is an excellent piece, unfortunately, I couldn't enjoy it as much as I'd have liked just because I had to read every other word twice before moving on to the next, therefore I lost the meaning of the write.
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Hello Silver, I appreciate your comment. I am sorry that you didn't enjoy this piece even though I enjoyed dreaming it up.
As for the comment "I'm sure to someone who has a dictionary for a brain this is an excellent piece."
The only two words that had given me my muse from the dictionary was 'Sylphs Roundelay', the rest of the words are from my everyday study of words period (I thought all writers are consumed with words and their meanings, old and new). Yet, even though I don't expect every reader to comprehend what I write unless they are a studier, some just settle for what they already know and have no desire to broaden their vocabulary--I can see where and why one would get lost in the scribe with that in mind.
Have a good day.
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It does read like a fable meant to seduce one
until they wander the pages while the day and
night move on. I love vocabulary and can easily identify with the way a book can consume you...
cast its phrases as new-found perspective; shift-change a foundation. I need to bookmark this
just to refer to some of these words later.
Blue
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Thank you very much Blue Rew for your kind comment. I'm glad you enjoyed this scribe...
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Best wishes in the contest!
Write on!
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Yes, It can easily be read wrong, and not till i read your author notes did i understand what you were trying to say,
I very deep and profound write, indeed
All the best to you in the contest
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Hello Ken and thank you for your comment and well wishes.
I can see how some may see this holding bitterness, yet, this poem is actually a scribe about ancient poetry and the entrapment of their words when read (something I just dreamt up into a Fable). I was seeking to add some mysticism and creative imagination to this piece, in order to bring it to life and force it to jump out from it's page to those who lay eye's on it.
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this brought some mixed feeling to me with the sylph and some powerful expressions..enjoyed it
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Thank you so very much for such kind comment....
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ok you got me..
some of this language i haven't heard of but it still had such a flow to it, and involving story that it hardly mattered to me..especially by the time i got to the last stanza, wow!! powerful!!
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Thank you for your comment Swan, they are always appreciated..
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