melted;
into a cold
brown shade,
darker,
than the
eclipse
covering
your heart.
Author notes
prompt: icy rainbow
13 words.
'cold brown shade' because if you melt/combine all the colors of a rainbow together they would turn brown.
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A contest entry
- Just 13 words :) by Lady Michaella.
400 points, ended December 16, 2008, 18 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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ooooooo! THIS is excactly what i wanted. EXACTLY.
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lol
white!
thats bs!!
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actually ... if you combined all the true colors of a rainbow ... the color would be white (simple experiment with a color wheel)
tough to write something from a prompt with 13 words ... written well, execpt for the fallicy and a bit of "cliched simplicity" ... there's room to dance here, just take the first step ...
oh, and i cannot remember why i am at your page, or reading your work, but was glad i had it in front of me ... -
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really white..i never knew that, interesting..
but if it was paint it would definitely turn an ugly brown color aha.
thanks for the comment/critique
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this was brilliant, each word created a different thought, the middle section, "darker,
than the
eclipse"
was strong particularly in relation to the prompt.
you deserve a trophy in this one.
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thanks
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This is crazy-awesome. What a use of thirteen words... I'm impressed.
Good luck in the contest you've entered!
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thanks so much, your comments mean a lot to me
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This is so unusual and original.
"cold
brown shade"
Normally it's a cold grey shade, and a black eclipse.
I love that you made this image your own XD
Shelly
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i did brown because if you melt all the color of a rainbow together it would turn ugly and brown.
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Awh yeah, I remember that now. And no matter what other colours you mix in, it will stay an ugly brown, how sad
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wow,
what a fantastic and beautiful spin on the prompt, gorgeous imagery - a thing all your poems seem to posess. i especially like the final 3 lines/4 words - a very powerful way to finnish such a brilliant poem.
best of luck in the contest!!
ElectricBloom
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thanks so much
it really means a lot from a poet as brilliant as you
.. wow that sounds like im sucking up majorly aha.. but honestly you're amazing.
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