‘she has a fragile mind’, my mother whispered over the phone late at night when I was supposed to be asleep.
‘I don’t know if I can take care of her any longer, I thinking of sending her away soon’, my mother spoke again, with just a hint of regret.
I crept up to my room wondering what I ever said that was different, did I deserve to be sent away? I fell asleep thinking morbid thoughts.
in the morning I was too scared to speak, for fear that I would say something wrong and away I would go to the big white building across the road where I sometimes went to get brain scans, but the difference would be that I would have to stay their forever.
even not speaking my mother thought that something was wrong, I knew she was thinking that today would be the best day to let me go, while I was still young. she assumed I knew nothing and I would remember nothing. she thought I didn’t know of her plans to run away as soon as she was free of me.
I got dressed in the clothes my mother liked best, I braided my own hair, knowing she loved it, subconsciously I hoped that she might want to keep me after seeing how nice I looked. she didn’t even look my way when I came downstairs and said good morning, all she said was that we were going on a little trip today. I saw the excitement gleam in her eyes, I saw the regret for a split second, but it was quickly swept away by the anxiety and the happiness that she would receive with me gone.
I went, quietly, I did what I was told to do. I stayed in the building hoping that my mother would visit me and say how much she missed me and take me home. I’m not stupid, I will not cry. if this is what my mother thinks is best for me, than I’ll bear it. I always did love her. and all I can do now is watch out for her, knowing she can’t see me.
time goes by slowly when you are alone, and even more slowly when you have been abandoned. I will still watch out for her, as upside down as that is, the daughter watching out for her mother.
I’m still confused.
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16. title: clock stopped
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kay so the story behind this is that I randomly found it on my computer today.. i vaguely remember writing it a couple months ago.
and I edited it a little bit and decided that it fit your title prompt.. so yea, here it is 
hope you like, I know it's kind of strange.
it's supposed to be a neglectful mother sending away her young daughter (when I was writing I was thinking like between 7-9) to an orphanage (originally it was supposed to be an asylum, but my attention span got the better of me, and I didn't know what else to write) and then the mother would go live with her travelling boyfriend.
hope that makes sense.
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Good Job!
Some of the prompts were pretty tough, to not be able to choose your own and still convey such feeling on target is something. There are times when it seems that time itself stands still, the morning you depicted is a perfect example. Good job!
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in the morning I was to scared to speak
to --> too
I got dressed in the clothes my mother liked best, I braided my own hair, knowing she loved it, subconsciously I hoped that she might want to keep me after seeing how nice I looked. she didn’t even look my way when I came downstairs and said good morning, all she said was that we were going on a little trip today. I saw the excitement gleam in her eyes, I saw the regret for a split second, but it was quickly swept away by the anxiety and the happiness that she would receive with me gone.
soooo sad.
emu I love you. <3
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Awww, this is so sad. Beautiful, but sad.
I know what you mean, my boyfriends cousin is a neglectful mother and I reckon she would do this, when her daughter [who is now 1] is older, because her prison bound boyfriend seems to be all she cares about.
bleh, some people have no priorities at all.
some just have the wrong ones. -
bah
i am let down
xD
tell me when ur done!!
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16. Title: Clock Stopped
Well hope you like this one. Best of luck, know you can do it
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i do like it
ill try my best
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