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I begged her not to go
but she said she had to

Tears streaming down my flushed cheeks
my heart racing
and my hands shaking

 

I tried to reason with her
but it was all in vain
her jaw set
and her heart determined

 

A long silence fell between us
like a wall blocking her from me
Our eyes were locked
our hands clasped so tight

 

She left so quickly
I wondered if there was time
time to change her mind
I tried
I begged
I pleaded

 

I watched her go
through glistening tears
and through my silent torment
I prayed for her return

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  • Saint Irial
    December 15, 2008

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    Moving, a good dramatic rhytm... You express what many do but this time it feels real, it's got body and it is a rather beautiful piece. I like the simple language, that way it feels more earnest.