in the early hours of the morning
I sit between yesterday and tomorrow;
waiting for the darkness to make itself known
in the morning light that never sprouts --
until we've accepted dusk
and opened our arms to dawn
this is the changing of time,
this is how life goes on
Author notes
Celebration of age.
Pic cred: "blue life..." by gnato @ Deviantart.com
A contest entry
- Birthday Brevity by CitrineSunrise.
700 points, ended December 29, 2008, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Shoot.
Comments
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The first two lines of this poem create such a perfect visual image and the rest of the work goes on to develop this metaphor. It is amazing how much you are able to convey in these few words. Brevity at its best. Thank you for your entry. Peace, Liz
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Excellent
Another terrific expression. So skillful and well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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Thank-you!
This had a picture that it went PERFECTLY with, I felt, but AP took it away
Oh well - it was like a story book type thing before
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Excellent
my goodness lil bro this is a mighty powerful complicated but extremely well penned poem from ya and I really love the depth flow and beauty through out this poek from ya the picture is flippin awesome and the detailing you put forth into your words is incredible. any ways nice work and very good luck with the contest
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Hmmmmmmm wow, again my dear this is just brilliant. I wish you had more time to post!!!! your mind is amazing. Good luck. I love to wake to a new day, even if at times I live in the old world.
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Wow~
First the picture so grabs and so do Your words for they stand alone~ Power packed
Love how You presented this~
and that second line-
message resonates~ deep this is
Thank You for sharing Your Talent also Spirit~
Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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in the early hours of the morning
I sit between yesterday and tomorrow;
waiting for the darkness to make itself known
that is some hot lines right there, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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