Each year the icing grows thicker
around my layer,
while eyes become
more like candles
with flame growing dim.
Eventually my mind
will lose its filling,
then I won't remember
why I ever
worried about my cake,
just having a party
without stressing
over what was baked.
Author notes
Today's theme is: CELEBRATION
47 words
A contest entry
- Birthday Brevity by CitrineSunrise.
700 points, ended December 29, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This short poem was deceptively deep; the cake metaphor well developed. Thank you for your entry. Peace, Liz
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Well that's a thought provoking piece for us oldies! But you are so right in what you say in this. nExcellent.
Best wishes in the contest.
Gaylene
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Whooooooooo..You have taken this prompt to great dimensions with this imagery..The cake a type of a metaphor for how we can change over the years from the issue of a cake, and just being glad to celebrate with one..Our values and perceptions with age of birthdays..the cake and fanfare is not as important as life and being able to celebrate another year, or event! Excellent creative penning here!
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You used this prompt very well and I liked it! Good luck in the contest hon
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