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Is it serenity to feel the pain instead of you feeling this?
Why would I spend suffering when I am hurt?
Do you deserve to feel my tears?
Why would It be me?

I offered myself to you to take care of,
But you just let me took care of you
I give my undivided attention
But you can’t keep me safe
As I kept myself locked for you
Yeah, just for you,

I won’t mind if this damn world isn’t mine
But I can wrap it, paint it
So you can live free with it
But,
Would you take this world without me?





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  • sense surreal gold member
    January 18
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    I won’t mind if this damn world isn’t mine
    But I can wrap it, paint it
    So you can live free with it
    But,
    Would you take this world without me?


    I love your voice on this part

    a title suggestion, how about...this world without me


    Anna Lee


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    December 15, 2008

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    i like it hope you find a title for it but i don't think it would be a fun world without you my friend, keep it flowing