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The only one!?

I can feel it, when you’re not with me
Sharing your smile without me
You used to be mine
But why do I feel like this?
I can’t feel that am the only one.

Isn’t it hard to see that am just a woman?
Then I hope you feel what i feel
‘coz I don’t know what you feel
When you’re not with me
When you’re not around.

Stupid, isn’t it?
But am just a woman
Who could feel that
I’m not the only one…

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  • loki black
    December 15, 2008
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    I've felt something similar, painful, I like the way you written it


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    December 15, 2008

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    no you are not, you always have some strong emotions in you work, i guess that is one of the reason i love to read them, keep it flowing