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No Grey

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No Grey

Surprised and distracted, don’t be surprised,
agree when you’re told, pretend you agree.
Despised ‘cause you acted, you’ll be despised.
Free in a black and white world is not free.

Just follow the rules, pretend you are just,
close your eyes to the hate as blind minds close.
Trust in those people you never can trust,
suppose that they’re right; be loved I suppose.

Move to the beat of a different drum, move.
Be yourself the way they want you to be.
Prove that you’re right so that they cannot prove.
See how they hate when their eyes cannot see.

We live in a black and white world; don’t we?
Free your mind and simply pretend you’re free.

 

 

 

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Art work by: adnrey

Guidelines for the Shadow Sonnet may be found here.

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  • echo-ink
    January 9

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    Yessa! free, but not really, are we?
    You said a mouthful of truth with this one.
    BRAVO!

    Bell


  • Swan song gold member
    December 25, 2008

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    This is alovely well crafted and nurtured poem
    I think this took effort and patience all which you have and did i mention talent!


  • Ellis gold member
    December 22, 2008

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    This is so human, such human behavior
    Cats do not behave like that
    Telling it like it is we favor
    A human should behave like a cat

    Tiki Cat
    Buy Tiki Cat Food
    "Too Good For Humans"


  • melphleg gold member
    December 17, 2008

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    Reminds me of hypocrisy. You have a profound and deep message in here. It reads like sarcasm to get its point across.
    So you trying to catch up with the number of Shadow Sonnet's I've written?

  • Eusebius
    December 17, 2008

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    Oh, I can't tell you how much I love this sonnet! It is wonderful, and it flowls like honey, rich and smooth! Just brilliant! Superb!


  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    December 16, 2008

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    interesting write...someone else said it, i know, that this is a piece that needs to be read a few times to really capture the true talent that you really have...one of these days i have to try to write a sonnet. I do like them, but I don't do well with restrictions ...lol.


  • Pure Thought silver member
    December 15, 2008

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    I for one don't need to look up the guidelines, for I know this i s a perfect one.

    Well written.


  • albymyheart gold member
    December 15, 2008

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    Brilliant!

    The form, line construction, rhyme, thoughts and meanings all gel together to paint the perfect black and white reflection of society. Just simply a brilliant piece of work...alby


  • rhondasail
    December 15, 2008

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    This takes more than one read...You are truly gifted to be able to set such immense images, emotions and questions within a tight form so brilliantly. I very much like this form, and the substance you lay here-the depth of contrast, the boldness, the precision...sort of an in-your-face 'dare-you-to be-truly-free' sonnet. (Feelin' grey just from the reading, ...)Much to ponder here, my friend...Best of luck in the contest. Peace, Rhonda


  • Poetic-Theorem silver member
    December 15, 2008

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    You always dazzle me with your poetic forms and Genius
    This is simply amazing
    I love the ending...
    "We live in a black and white world; don’t we?
    Free your mind and simply pretend you’re free."
    Powerful and profoundly true
    Wish you the very best
    Much love and many blessings

    David


  • Cup-a-Joe
    December 15, 2008

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    *Two hugs,
    and a W0W.
    ~We live in black and white~
    Joe


  • Desire gold member
    December 15, 2008

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    Dang!!!!

    Oh My Word this gets the eyes swelled with tears- I started to read and I was like
    -Oy~
    Powerful and the message just struck many chords~
    Excellent form and You just let it flow~
    Bravo!
    Love this Form Queen!!

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent also Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet One
    Best wishes too
    with much love & light~ Desire~*~


  • Tirrell
    December 15, 2008

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    I love this one!
    The imagery here is more than it apears, and the shadow-echo actually acutely accents the metaphors, to a point where the imagery blends and becomes more than just the poem.
    A masterpeice to me is a word I rarely use in descriptions and responses to the works I read, but I feel that it fits here, just right. Clear, consise and just right. I shall bookmark this one. I wish you much luck in this contest, But, I do not feel you need the luck, but it is yours just the same.


  • Ariosto II. gold member
    December 15, 2008

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    I'll have to look up the Shadow sonnet guidelines, I really like what your making from them..this is great advice for anyone to follow!
    have a wonderful day!
    loveD


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    December 15, 2008

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    This has a firm, didactic stride to it, Sis. So many of the shadows here are bold imperatives - agree, move, be, prove, see, free. The "different drum" beats all the way through it.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    December 15, 2008

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    Shadows are cast even in shadows

    thoughtful poetry to the prompt and a very well worked shadow sonnet, of course!!!


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    December 15, 2008

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    i can only say this was something, i like the poem and the flow, i will have to look up shadow sonnet, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • k.a.s.s.i.e
    December 15, 2008

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    a black and white CAN be colorful! the words were smooth and grouped well(of course)...

    very preety!
    ~kassie


  • Skybow silver member
    December 15, 2008

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    Queen of the shadow sonnet, you have crafted an amazing write here. It has a wonderful-tripping flow and tight structure as well as a valuable message. Incrediable!

    Best of luck in the contest


  • redhanded
    December 15, 2008

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    wow I love this piece! you summd up the image very well. beautifully written. best of luck to you in the future and with your writing.
    andi
    (redhanded)


  • Faeryn
    December 15, 2008

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    This is wonderful! I love it! I love the last line in the third stanza; such powerful writing about society.
    Love,
    Tay


  • Azgar
    December 15, 2008
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    Ooh! Delightfully delicious. Like the repetition of the words.


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    December 15, 2008
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    Wonderful!!! Love the pic with this. Best of luck!

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