This is my last resort
this knot strong enough to hold me
anger rolls inside my head
depression has cast it's shadow upon me
this bedroom is full of dismal splattered walls
the closet rack sings it's chorus
tieing this knot tightly upon
this cold steel rod 7 feet high in my closet.
The pain to follow shakes my insides
who will find me? I ponder.
I slip the noose around my neck
fear has taken over.
One jump away
and it is all over
several shallow breathes
to come
I think about it a little longer
until I take my jump.......
I was only hanging by a thread
until that final strand snapped
Now I am hanging by this rope
the death cord was stronger than floss.
Author notes
option 10-death cord.
In a list
A contest entry
- Titles! by Walking Oxymoron.
700 points, ended December 28, 2008, 25 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
please give me your honest opinion. I will return the favor a.s.a.p thanks.
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What a great and moving write. It is a very beautiful but very sad piece. The piece is also so full of imagry... i can almost see the person hanging by the rope. Best of luck in the contest.
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I really liked this and I hope this isnt a true picture of what you want to happen....may waste a lot of talent lol nah seriously It was dark and deep but excellent work xx bless be
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naw it is not what I actually want to happen. it is just really based off of the prompt. I had a ex gf who killed herself in this manner tho, and I am the one who found her...I wouldnt do that to any one and I never want to have to cut any one down again. thanks so much for your comment though. best of luck to you in the future and with your writing.
andi
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Ooooohhhh.
How depressing!
Excellent write here...Shame your desire to write was so self destructive!!
Aw.....
Ok, I like the imagery you put into this, the way you set it out, and teh way the poem has two definitive sides, like chapters.
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thanks so much for your comment I greatly appreciate it. best of luck to you in the future and with your writing.
andi
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this is good i think you did a great job on this poem, with the title you got, keep it flowing
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thanks buddi!
I appreciate it.
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