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Surreptitious lungs and half-moon eyes

In full color like sunshine over a flower
Deep and empty like a fathomless breeze
It’s the sparkle that has set in your eyes
Navy blue, and crisp like the sea

Not far from here, I get lost in a delirious wonder
It was much like swimming in saltwater
Burning the smallest of cuts, but as refreshed as fresh does
A red balloon wanders by and its one more cup of time
Don’t say the last adieu, just give me whimsical

Give me broken like a record, let me read lips
I have a sound memory when I close my eyes
But it’s just an illusion of the sun rising when you blink
And here I am waiting like a fly in that last second of life
I don’t want to die, and be the caprice of diluted suicides

You,
Just a boy
It really is too bad you were beautiful

Author notes

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7GhZygigFSI : Oxygen - Colbie Caillat

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  • Cannonsfire
    December 19, 2008
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    I really like where you took this song. Thanks for the entry C


  • Ademon
    December 15, 2008

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    you really know how to set the tone... It’s the sparkle that has set in your eyes
    Navy blue, and crisp like the sea
    great read.. best of luck in your endeavor!


  • Cannonsfire
    December 14, 2008
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    Good luck your song is OXYGEN - COLBIE CAILLAT