Velvet red, an endless sea of beauty
stretching further than my eyes could see.
Serenity engulfs my senses,
overwhelmed, black tears shed forth
an infinite stream of sorrow; spewed out
surrounding the ground below me.
Tick..Tick..Tick.. Time is passing slowly
yet with every second my heart races
staring up, no longer warm, the sun has eluded me
This black presence, Darkness has overcome.
Tick.Tick.The time is passing quickly
as tiny grains of sand falling through space
Soon, I will have all the time of the world.
Slowly, I close weary bloodshot eyes;
Suddenly flashes an excruciating light
My soul can now roam free forever
in this charcoal field of ashes
from my beautiful destruction
Author notes
Umm I wrote this from, what i saw in the picture and the prompt it self...I know you said not to use your prompt word for word....but this is what I came up with... Hope you enjoy.
A contest entry
- "oh bloody...." by Tigris.
550 points, ended January 10, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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"in this charcoal field of ashes from my beautiful destruction"
I swear there are lines I read in some poems that stick with me
This is one of them.
I may just have to steal it and quote you and do a contest lol
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I actually really like where you went with this, needs some form and structure but it's good hun C
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I think your words and this picture are fantastic. I'm really quite a fan of your poetry! Brilliant images penned. I love the last few lines so much. Great work.
Laura =D
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Wow, amazing job with this piece. Love the concept, goes deep. Great flow and imagery too! Once again another amazing piece, Ademon! Bravo
♥ Kathraina
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You do poems based on a prompt rather well, at least that's what I've seen thus far. Beautiful imagery you've painted in this poem, well done and thanks for sharing.
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I do what I can....I have never done Picture Prompt before until just last week when I first got on this sight and seems to be one of my favorite styles of writing...It just opens up inside me and it's...yea, it's great. Thank you for the great comment!
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this is fantastic, dark, and so powerful,. BEAUTIFUL imagery here. beautiful feeling you create here. your a truly excelent writer.
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Wow that is a lot of emotion. I love it
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Beautiful imagery, deep emotion. Once again we learn we are our own worst enemy.
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A very powerful and emotional poem you have penned with your great imagery. Sad but true words on life and death by man's own destruction. Excellent write.
Take care,
Sandy
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Wow another amazing write.!!!
Great take on the pic prompt.
"My soul can now roam free forever
in this charcoal field of ashes
from my beautiful destruction"
Great imagery, well done.
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Again a very nice poem. About time passing. Good write. You used imagery well in this one. It flows well. And tells an interesting story. Good job. Thanks for sharing this and thanks for placing it in our friends reading list.
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oh my goodness. your words are beautyful! it's a tragic, yet incredibly captivating piece! your words flow perfectly and give it the feel of suspense and urgency all at once.
I love the lines: "The time is passing quickly
as if tiny grains of sand falling through space"
and "My soul can now roam free forever
in this charcoal field of ashes
from my beautiful destruction"
Great piece! Give me more!
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I did very much enjoy it, you spindle words to life and then you utterly destroy me with their emotions. Thank You.
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wow I really enjoyed this write! nice take on the prompt! well pen'd bravo!
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this is totally descriptive and eloquent!!! WOW what a write !!!!...its flow is awesome and the scene it shows is beautiful.It was breathtaking....I loved IT!
Jenn
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I love it!!! Not sure if I'll enter the contest or not. I'm into the touchy- feely poetry right now. Good Luck!
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Great read. I like the ' tick... tick' it adds movement and suspense to the verse.
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oh wow..! This is awesome! I love this part..."My soul can now roam free forever
in this charcoal field of ashes
from my beatufiul destruction"...
so emotional and captures the readers attention from the very begining!!!! Gold for sure!!!
Love,
becca
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YAY
It is beautifully put. I like how you incorporated the title. I love how you took the picture and prompt and put it so clearly. I would have over analyzed...
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Their serenity engulfed my senses,
overwhelemed, black tears shed forth
an infinite stream of sorrow; spewed out
surrounding the ground about me.
Is it supposed to be about me or is it supposed to say below me?
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You totally saved me!!! it's suppose to be "Below" me and thank you for pointing that out, I changed it!!!
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Your very welcome. I think you should do many more picture prompts. That seems to help you.
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