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Melted Wax

we live as specks of existential stardust
carefully displayed in glass-covered cases
and our wings have been clipped
from centuries of flying too close to the sun
much like Daedalus and Icarus
we’re mortal entertainment for whimsical gods.





Author notes

prompt: “No one is free, even the birds are chained to the sky.”
-Bob Dylan

Artist credit: http://tanize.deviantart.com/art/Icarus-102104111

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  • Sadpuppet
    December 30, 2008

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    i love the story of Icarus and Daedalus. and i love this poem more. so short, but very descriptive. with calm anger mixed into the poem, this is great.


  • Icarus
    December 16, 2008

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    WOW, I love the subtle mention of Icarus and Daedalus . That alone got me hooked but the picture and the carefully chosen words make it amazing x


  • Joseph Hollis
    December 15, 2008
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    Haha, thanks for the faith.


  • chilali
    December 15, 2008

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    I told you, I told you! This was going to win! Hahaha. Congratulations on the Bronze Joe!

  • She Stole My Voice
    December 15, 2008
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    fbsdbfsifs.

    I'm left speechless.
    ♥


  • Joseph Hollis
    December 15, 2008
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    Thank you for your thoughtful comments.


  • RedemptionSong17
    December 15, 2008

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    i absolutely adore this poem! it really is amazing, so clever and imaginative, with such a great message
    peace& much love
    Emilee


  • Jesann gold member
    December 15, 2008

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    Very impressive
    I really liked this write, a good take on the prompt.
    "we're mortal entertainment for whimsical gods"
    Mmm..what a thought!!!!

  • chilali
    December 14, 2008
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    Again, this is another brilliant piece by you Joseph! I love this. Short and deep and so true. I loved your take on the prompt! The first two lines are just pure brilliance, same goes for the rest of this poem! This is Gold. You are Gold! Good luck in the contest, not that you need it. Na-uh, you don't!

    Much love
    Ylova


  • Kathraina silver member
    December 14, 2008
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    Interesting piece. Good job, and nice pic.


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    December 14, 2008

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    Brilliant!!!

    Perfect image with this poem. It reminds me of Mark Twain's story, "The Mysterious Stranger". Good luck in the contest - this is a winner!!! Peace always, xx Cyn xx


  • Venugopal gold member
    December 14, 2008

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    so true and apt, eye oener for those who are blinded by beliefs, thanks for sharing my friend

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