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Silken fabrics struggled to release

Abilities facilitate controlled descents

Stabilizing consistency

-when they soared-

 

On-the-hunt for unopened chambers
within beautiful surroundings
Countering stories;

that had been told.

 

"Be creative!", said they.

 

To look beyond this expanding balloon

-your goal-

 

Afterall son,


"Parachutes work the best; when unfold."

 

 

Author notes

Prompt: Parachutes
up to 50 words

Photo Credits: www.deviantart.com

"The mind is like a parachute"

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  • Jesann gold member
    February 16
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    This is a great write.
    I loved it.
    Very well done, congrats on the HM.


  • Ryan79
    February 9

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    Nice. It has a mysterious feel. The whole thing comes together when you get to the end and I realized what the poem was all about.


  • Meroza
    February 6

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    This poem is brilliant, like any other of your poems.
    Such emotons in your every word. I adore this one.

    Congrats on the shiny


  • etoile
    January 8

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    i really like this. your take on the prompt is great. and i love all the imagery. this is so original and creative, i love that. the first stanza is my favourite.

    thanks for entering and goodluck


  • Ken-Maverick
    December 25, 2008

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    This is quite a profound write Alyzeh,
    our minds work best when opened like a parachute indeed,
    Well done

    All the best to you in the contest

    Ken


  • xDemonicxAngelx
    December 23, 2008

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    I really really like this, you did a fantastic job with the prompt! I loved reading it and the last line really makes you think. The picture was fab too. And the title was perfect for the poem! You know what, I loved it all! All the best in the contest to you!

    Take care


  • morgana raven Greeters member
    December 23, 2008

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    This poem has a brilliant metaphor which you worked into the poem really well. I havent read anything like this for quite a while so it was refreshing.
    Wonderful work.
    Laura.


  • Joseph Hollis
    December 22, 2008

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    You hit the nail on the head with this one. The mind being a parachute is a lovely metaphor. You expanded on that idea wonderfully. Well done and best of luck!


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    December 22, 2008

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    Well done Ms Poet!

    You have captured this prompt to the T.!
    and i didn't know what the prompt was until i finished reading such tricky metaphors great Job!
    thank you for sharing this brillant poem!

    Good luck in the contest!

    Blessings

    Rend


  • AGratefulDiscovery
    December 21, 2008
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    stun me. stunning.

    like always, i can't get enough.


  • Titus gold member
    December 20, 2008

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    I somehow thougth of those poor people making clothes and other fabrics, not ideal interpretation but to put it forward that, the metaphor was one of beautifully extended clothes and fashion design, to see the end result suddenly, and to write with contrasting issues here it must be one heck of a poem. Wow

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