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Come Near Me if You Dare

Come near me if you dare,
I'm depressed if you're aware.
Come closer if you wanna suffer,
Your life will just get tougher.

My sobs are very loud,
I feel like I'm in a crowd.

Being suffocated by clones of you,

My face then starts turning blue.

 

Come near me if you dare,

Its turning into a nightmare.

I can feel what you think,

Your heart's starting to sink.

 

 

You look into my mirror,

You don't want it any clearer.

So you don't have to see,

The appearance of you and me.

Author notes

Depression on my highest level.

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  • Hells Shadow
    December 16, 2008
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    a great write

  • Xxpoison.kissesxX silver member
    December 15, 2008
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    wow .. nice


  • Xx.Toxic.xX
    December 14, 2008

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    nice. this is depressing, but it's very expressive. i love it. (welcome to AP by the way. word of advice, seperate different catagories by commas when you submit your poems.)

  • xSuicidexDreamx
    December 14, 2008
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    Very good rhyming and also very deep. Great job. =]]

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