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Under Filtered Skies

By the time I realised
I was voicing my thoughts
the vicinity was clear.

They ran like
bushy tailed cats
in the path of a
double-decker bus.

The bus was a glitch
of difference in society,
and I was the pollution.

I was only thinking,
what if I was a bird
flying free and speaking free
without the distant,
glaring eyes of many cats;

but no one would join me
under my filtered skies.

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  • etoile
    January 8

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    i love the imagery in this.
    it's beautiful.
    the third stanza is my favourite, along with the last two lines.
    i love the title. this is so original and creative, i really like it.

    thanks for entering and goodluck


  • Glasyalabolas
    December 16, 2008

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    Sorry that you just missed the judging of this contest.

    I like the take on the prompt here, the insight into how people can be and are limited by society, often coming under severe scrutiny (and criticism) just for acting, being or seeming different, just usually shrouds us in a hail of negativity. This piece speaks of this in a very visual and metaphorical way.

    Good write.

  • Glasyalabolas
    December 15, 2008
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    No problem, I can give you No.34.

    Title Prompt No.34 is: 'Under Filtered Skies'

    Be advised that this contest closes at midnight tonight and has been extended 3 times already, so tonight is the definate close date.

    Many thanks!