staring at the neon
‘no vacancy’ sign;
I realized that I was
unwanted
and I had
nowhere
to go.
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I’m stuck being hopeless,
in a world where
I’m restricted
to telling
lies.
Author notes
32 words.
“No one is free, even the birds are chained to the sky.”
-Bob Dylan
..it's what the prompt brought me; sorry if it's not what you're looking for .. but i do like the ending. blaaaaaah.
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In a list
A contest entry
- 20-40 Words by She Stole My Voice.
400 points, ended December 15, 2008, 20 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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congrats on the gold !!
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Well done, brilliant piece. Short and hard-hitting.
*~Huntress~*
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thanks
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What did I tell you? Gold!!! Congratulations love!
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ehee, your psychic
but i didnt expect it at all
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Amazing, much?
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omg mary, i didnt expect the gold at all
thanks so much
ps. the prompt was brilliant, as are most of your contests
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You do like the ending?
I LOVE THE ENTIRE THING!
as usual, of course.
But again, short and but sooooo deep.
The sign of a truly talented poet
Shelly
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thanksssssssss
but i personally think the second part is the only part worth reading aha
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Well, I do think the second part is a little bit better than the first, but you couldn't really have one without the other, as the first one says that you have nowhere to go, and in the second part you elaborate on that
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What a great take on that lovely quote. I am huge fan of Dylan, you see. Hehe. I entered that contest as well I wish I hadn't now Hehehe. Good luck, not that you need it
Much love
Ylova
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