As the sand drifts along the beach
I know your within reach
It's not that you ever very far
sometimes I believe your my lucky star
You opened up my heart
I knew I loved you from the very start
I love the time we spend to together
All I know is that I want this to last forever
You know how to make me laugh till my side starts to ache
All I know sweetheart it's you that I want in my life and
there when I awake
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Written February 8th, 2004
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I love the metaphores... i really like this poem. the only possible critisism that i could possibly give would be that the rhythm skips a beat here and there... (and the rhyming)
i'm a little bias towards freeflow, but far as i can tell this is written well
(sorry if that came out a bit negative, it wasn't supposed to be -
I love the metaphores... i really like this poem. the only possible critisism that i could possibly give would be that the rhythm skips a beat here and there... (and the rhyming)
i'm a little bias towards freeflow, but far as i can tell this is written well
(sorry if that came out a bit negative, it wasn't supposed to be -
I love the metaphores... i really like this poem. the only possible critisism that i could possibly give would be that the rhythm skips a beat here and there... (and the rhyming)
i'm a little bias towards freeflow, but far as i can tell this is written well
(sorry if that came out a bit negative, it wasn't supposed to be -
Hey Couzie,
This is a great poem, I really really liked it. I always knew you were a greast poet.
Lovies Always,
Chea -
hey you,
awwww...........this is really good i ain't got around to reading your stuff yet (same for you to me) sorry i couldn't get on @ 8 last night i had a ton of home work
cuz hug
tori -
Well this poem is very sweet. Although Im not to sure I've ever seen sand drift on a beach
but none-the-less very good! keep it up, Please take a look at my stuff sometime too
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