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Valentine Dream

In my heart, you blossom,
Your wings unfold...you shine.
To my soul, you whisper,
Tiny love drops, dripping.
I sail in my spring dreams,
Your tears trickle behind,
Your kiss, like a feather,
Gently touches my lips.
I reach out your light,
Glimmers in your shadow,
I catch your black shadow
That melts into thin air.

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Written February 8th, 2004

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  • Lioness
    November 8, 2005
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    again i like it, but.... amybe you should change "into" to "in" in the last line. it just seems like it would flow better. but again it's just my opinion, you don't have to. IM me sometime, I miss talking to you. tori does to.
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