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Freedom is the key

What chains our existence together,
like a puzzle piece
at christmas time?
while heart shaped
and serene looking,
it is none other but our very own hearts
attatched to strings fallen from the stars;
we may have wings,
but we can't fly away;
not yet anyway...

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well this didn't seem to take long to write, but I have no idea if thats a good or bad thing.. I suppose you will have to tell me.

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  • goalsv
    December 14, 2008

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    A nice look into the picture. Some very good insight for us to think a bout. The last line sums up the feeling of the poem so well. Almost leaves you wanting a part two.