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Gnarled November

The fields are flooded and patched with sheen
while mirrored trees float on silent silver.
The rains have brought beauty to mild meadow green
and smokey clouds crowd the woods.
Weary with the unusual gnarled dankness
growling grey creeps down the hills
misting meadows in twilight gloom.
November is old this year
as it slips into winter's crispness.

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  • Princess Perdue gold member
    December 22, 2008

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    This work is simply stunning to say the least! ...the imagery and description are both outstanding.. Well done with this beautiful entry for the contest. Good luck.

    Shaz xx


  • Stuart Higginson gold member
    December 17, 2008

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    Hi Joy!

    Thanks for the earlier message. I shall eager await your entry if you're inspired I hope you will be able to spend more time online over the year to come, having heard from you that you were not able to be online much this year - I have only just returned to the 'net after almost two years away, with sporadic visits in between, thanks to generous friends letting me borrow their internet prior to me getting my own connected last month!!

    I enjoyed the imagery in this. Quite a haunting journey through a forest in November, that you have paved for us here! Woodlands ... bright or gloomy, youthful or gnarled, always remind me of childhood, when my grandfather and mother used to both take me on walks through Ernesettle woods, near to where I used to live. Plymbridge woods are also quite magical, as there is a lovely freshwater river flowing through them, ideal for spring and summer picnics!


  • Olivias Violin
    December 15, 2008
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    Great write!


  • ShelleyA gold member
    December 14, 2008
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    Hi Mum. A beautiful write. Good imagery, flow and tone. Vivid descriptives. You paint a delightful picture with your words. Good word choice, alliteration and nice assonance. Truly a visual piece that I much enjoyed. Excellent closing lines. Well penned. Best wishes in the contest.


  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    December 14, 2008

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    Thr imagery here is amazing and as the last lines loomed, I felt the chill of winter in my bones. I enjoyed reading this, thanks for sharing.

    Love you Grams, always

    Laura x

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