It seems that everything is falling
But the stars are always shining
To brighten up the darkness
And open up your eyes
To free you from the fear
And put away your lies
It doesn’t matter what you did
All the stars are here for you
Because the sickness of the world
Is always hard to cure
So that’s why the stars are here
Are there, way up in the sky
So the darkness wont be so blind
And the moon wont look so lonely
If all there was is nothing
But a big white hole in the sky
Stars are like frozen eyes
Watching the world go by
And whispering in your soul
With cold and frosted lips
Saying it will all be okay
And you sit there for a while
Looking at the sky
Then you suddenly realize
It’s just a bunch of city lights
Mocking the black painted sky
And giving you a sense of it all
Falling back into the tears of your cry
Author notes
Hope sometimes breaks your heart in the end.
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wow...I really like your metaphor in this piece. very deep...I wouldn't change a thing
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thanks for yur comment!
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Oh this becomes a tragic, the stars sometimes and how can they be so beautiful and gives us hope somehow, then we realized that they're just tears that we're crying, seeing, as were looking up in them...
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yea. looking at something that is totally fake and not realizing that it is until your happy is heart breaking to me.
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I really liked this poem. Never read one quite like this. The ending just kind of comes at you though. It's a good idea...but I think you could do more with it. Great job though...very good. =D
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awesome
It makes me think about stupid people the use of irony at the end just reminds me of stupid people but still a great poem
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Greetings -
This was extremely thought provoking. It has a good message, and it's clear that a lot of thought went into it's creation.
That being said, I did find the ending a little bit awkward. I really liked the idea, but the transition from the stars to the city lights is a little rough. Maybe if there was something about the realization that the hope you had for the stars was dashed as the realization that they're just the lights of an uncaring city, it might give it a little bit of depth.
My favorite line was the one about the stars being frozen eyes. I feel that a lot myself, and I have plenty of time to think about due to my nocturnal habits.
This was really nice otherwise, and keep it up!
Nikki
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