your obsession with her is toxic
you follow her
like a hunter does its prey
hidden in the shadows
you watch and wait
sooner or later
she'll suspect you
and instead of her lover,
you'll become her nemesis
her privacy exposed,
she'll show you no mercy
soon all will witness
her hatred for you
you will become
the forsaken lover
Author notes
Somebody Save Me:: Titles.
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Comments
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Hmmm reminds me of a particular ex of mine. Some people just don't know how to control their emotions and tell the difference between love and obsession. It can be a fine line though, just like love and hate.
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I liked this story. It is really straightforward, and descriptive of the situation at hand , and written in a poetic manor. I like the last line/title. It is really cool. Nice job with the HM!
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Wow this is really good gratz on winning the H.M
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thanks for the comment and the congrats!
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this was a great poem this person sounds like a starker i hope that this isn't about you because if someone is stocking you i would love to kill them but i cant because i'm here and your there good luck in the other contest i think this poem is a winner i hope all is good and if you need a friend i am here for you
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actually this poem is about one of my exes being obsessed with a girl he likes that's underage (apparently she'll be 18 in a few months). thanks for your comment and your thoughts! glad you liked my work here.
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Sounds just like a guy I know... But the 'her' is me. Gah honestly that guy is messed up. I definately think maintained steady pace with writing.
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Second my comment on the other one, you've entered the same poem in twice, didn't know if you realised or not.
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i believe this is the back ground i wanted and the other one was giving me problems...i think that's what happened
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