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The moon does rise with silver grace
So close today it burns through clouds
Releasing earth from cold embrace
While carrying its misty shrouds
I watch this all alone tonight
With crystal glass of merlot wine
While writing near the firelight
Deciding how to intertwine
I thought about this many times
But never had much luck before
A total flop but then sometimes…
Just not the way, I'm looking for
I write on pad with pen and ink
I like the flowing whisk and flair
Sure wish I knew what words would sync
So comfortable in this old chair
The logs burn down as sparks fly out
With yellows bright as well as gold
Do not know what to write about
Too much detail to whit unfold
I guess too late to finish now
Or too much wine to write or read
The gray cat near pleads her meow
So load the fire, to sleep concede
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Difficult Write…
Wandika 12-13-2008
A contest entry
- Filigree by Pamela A Lamppa.
1750 points, ended December 17, 2008, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This poem definitely came alive at the end with the "gray cat."
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Thank you
I am glad you liked the poem.
Jim
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I am smiling with this wonderful delight.
I love the complete metaphor in this and wonderful rhyme that carries its rhythm so beautifully throughout.
I tripped on the first line and felt a stronger take would simply be
"The moon rises" instead of "does rise" but everything else was in perfect sync - unlike the late night writer, sipping wine as he searches for his words.
I loved "Deciding how to intertwine"
That just made me smile.
Well done dear poet. A beautiful poem to the prompt and an unexpected tack taken that brought me a smile.
Thank you for this gem.
~Pamela
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Wow!
I don't think I ever won a trophy in your contests before Pam. This one I almost did not enter because I really could not come up with anything promising. Then this inspiration. I was hoping you would at the very least enjoy reading but truely did not expect to place. Thank you.
As far as the moon? Must be how I talk or your MN/MA accent. lol
Jim
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Who needs to write Your position sound just right to me .
A comfy chair, a roaring log fire, and a glass of fine wine. You want to much
Excellent write my friend
Good luck in the contest
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Thanks Legend
But why not both?
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What a brilliant piece of poetry Jim. So delightful to read on a night like this. THANKS MY FRIEND!!
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Thanks Pat
Getting tough down here.
Hope things looking up for you.
JIm
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