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Withering Away

Trapped, locked inside
The only one here is me
My feelings, my soul

These thoughts

Imprison me here.
Swimming through the black abyss
Emptiness swallowing me whole

 

This dark glowing ember

Embedded in my soul

Ashes surround me

Reminding me of the past

 

The car wreak in my head

This one thought

Killing me, poisoning me

Shattering my dreams

 

I can't believe

What I've done again

This agony won't end

There has to be a way out.

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  • xXxIceQueenxXx
    December 16, 2008

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    I'm not quite sure I understand how this relates to addiction. If you could clarify for me that would be wonderful.

    I do love how you end the poem in a sort of cliff-hanger. You can really sense confusion here too. "there has to be a way out" "trapped, locked inside". I think good writings should have a sort of suspense element like that, it makes it more personal.

    Good write, and thanks for entering my contest!