Fingertips fragility, entwined with affection,
adorned glances, like watching lilies bloom.
Ruptured tender ropes reveal fidelities complexion,
individual hands pull tighter, finalising loves’ chemical fume.
Obsession lined horizons, desire filled caverns,
cherubs touch and cupid strikes, as heavens here.
Christmas enchantment passions play in loves tavern,
rapturous lasting forever, the world disappears.
Tensed shoulders relax, sunsets smile in our reflection,
a mirrored time glass, freezes, making this ever-lasting.
Gods and goddesses unite, giving wings for our elevation,
witches and sorceresses, bless us, lifting us with magic casting.
Author notes
hope its ok =D
thank you jon for helping me.
A contest entry
- the emotional rounds - 1 by Ryno.
400 points, ended December 26, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
comment and I'll RTF.
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Beautiful but mysterious in its own right. I enjoyed reading it.
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this write is really sensual and flowy. i love the word choices that give it a lifting passion.
Tensed shoulders relax, sunsets smile in our reflection,
a mirrored time glass, freezes, making this ever-lasting.
thats killer and i totally relate too
A+
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I Like This Sis!
The BG is beautiful, with lots of pretty hues, I always enjoy reading the sweet soul of you.
Nice flow, and another wonderful read. All the best to you sis in the contest! 
peace, bro timothy
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I'm in agreement!
Subtle and sensuous, it speaks volumes in its word play and imagery.
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i love your word usage, it all flowed so beautifully!
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I LOVE IT!!
the imagery is soooo amazing, just like in everything you write, I love the words you use.
love it
bambi
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I liked the imagery here. Few people can string words together like you do. Excellent write here.
**Ktulu Blackwofle**
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Oh, Brie, sweetheart
this is beautiful.
Very well done, lovely <3
I miss you. -
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aww thank you!
I miss you too Zach!
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Wow, this is a real sweet read hunni! Love the splashes of alliteration and the imagery is beautiful. Good luck in the contest twinny!
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Very Nice
this is a very well pen struck poem you have written here. I like the over all depth beauty and how very deep it is. your wording is of good choice and your passion with this write is thorough through out it. over all this is quite a beautiful write and I admire your poetic ways. keep up the good work as always and good luck in my Lil Bro's contest.
Tiger
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wow this a very good poem and it say's so much at one time
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this is a great poem ^^ i love the word choice, it really adds to it ^^ great job ^^
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Hehe you're more than welcome, although i didn't really do much. Can't keep up with your poetic skill.
This is really cute. It's sensual while still having an innocent sweetness to it. I know you didn't like your last stanza much but i think it adds a great touch of fantasy, like when 2 people are in love it's like the world stops for them.
I love you
x
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