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Celestial dance (H.M.)

the dance floor is our universe
in harmony with the music
you follow my every step
protected by my shadow
holding your body close to mine
I move in turn with you
in total eclipse
we have become one
in embrace of the new year

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Prompt: Eclipse - limitation 50 words

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  • thepoetssoul
    March 8, 2009

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    This is wonderfully romantic and full of lovely thought.
    A splendid piece of poetry indeed.
    Be blessed in all you do.

    Tony


  • yellow blue bus gold member
    December 14, 2008

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    wow this is really good. the imagery is beautiful, and the way this is written is amazing. i like your take on the prompt. the ending is also very strong. i love the first couple lines, they're my favourite.

    thanks for entering and goodluck