I self medicate; another inebriated adventure is awaiting.
Some times it pours inside my mind.
Lightning crashes, thunder storms are raging.
My thoughts are constantly spinning and screaming at me.
I loudly call out in frustration.
Screaming nonsensical gibberish I am trying to drown out the noises.
They dwell deep inside longing to be expelled.
All the while I am losing time unable to recall what has transpired.
I drown myself in alcohol once more.
Synapses skip, order has become oppressed.
So I continue to yell until I am numb again.
Looking languidly, I am unable to change.
I am just a stranger to reality.
Author notes
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My object was to write about a crane. I chose an emotional death that is repeated over and over again. I looked up the crane as a bird. it describes them they dance crazily, hop in the air with great excitment, and other times they doze lazily. I interpreted to be a psychosis. I was inspired by the movies Trainspotting and The Crow. My other inspiration was looking through a psychology book of disorders.
A contest entry
- UNPLANNED: as unexpected as you [preliminary round] by Never Fall in Love.
400 points, ended December 22, 2008, 27 entries
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yes.
I however, agree with ryan on the fact that some thins can be greatly improved -but with some re-wordin of phrases and close attention to line breaks, this could be amazing!
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I think the phrase "stranger to reality is really overused - so I didn't like the title, nor the use of the title in the final line because it took emphasis away from it - but I like how you displayed refreshing emotion in the cliche topic, very nice.
I also think some of your phrasing/imagery has potential to be worked upon and tweaked - I think you could really produce strong visuals and stronger phrases - but remember, descriptive adjectives are not what makes good imagery/phrasing.
"I self-medicate" was great for me!
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Great!
I really enjoyed this candid poem. It shows the darker side to reality. Sometimes we all need to escape from it, and you've depicted it in a succinct way.
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